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What a clever way to tell a story, Bill! It did leave me gasping for breath! I must admit, I'd pobably walk out on a guy like that, too! It makes a subtle point though. We are all becoming far too automated. Carry on like this and we will evolve into human/AI hybrids!

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I'm glad you enjoyed Life by the Numbers, Jilly.

I didn't know till I had written several drafts what would happen at the end (and how to make it all work as a single sentence), but I'm sure the best response was for her to walk away.

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Apr 9, 2023Liked by Bill Adler

I must have bought the wrong brand.

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If only that was real feature!

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Apr 9, 2023Liked by Bill Adler

I would up and leave too!

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Yes, even if the restaurant has great desserts -- not worth sticking around for.

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Very clever, Bill! This man has chosen to give up his autonomy and become a slave. Sounds dystopian, but really not far off the mark for 2023 if you ask me. Scary!

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Thanks, Sharron. I'm glad you enjoyed Life by the Numbers.

Exactly. Fitness trackers are cool, but not always wise.

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Lovely! This flowed well, and I really liked the ending.

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Thank you, Andrei. I'm happy to hear that.

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Ha! Clever, and beautiful!

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Thank you, Sujan!

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Apr 30, 2023Liked by Bill Adler

Technology is good, but never forget how to think for yourself.

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I agree.

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Hahaha! Great twist at the end.

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A wonderful story!

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Thank you!

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Brilliant sentence and story!

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Thanks so much, Bill. I’m happy you enjoyed Life by the Numbers.

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Bill, I love what you did here. Great cadence, the piece rolls along faster and faster to the perfect ending. I like the one-sentence form too, and might try it with a piece or two. Keep up the good writing.

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Thank you, Didi. One-sentence stories are an artform to themselves. If you write any, let me know; I'd love to read them.

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I’m glad you used the word ‘salubrious.’

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Salubrious is a fun word.

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Apr 9, 2023Liked by Bill Adler

You're such a great author Bill Adler. Another good reality story.

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Thank you! I like writing and I'm glad you enjoy my stories.

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Good job, I was out of breath reading it.

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Thanks, Scott. I think Life by the Numbers is my longest one-sentence story.

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Apr 9, 2023Liked by Bill Adler

What a great way to start the day. I haven’t had a good morning laugh like this in a while. Well done Bill!

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Thanks, Dan. Alas, I've looked high and low for that brand of fitness watch, but haven't found it.

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Apr 9, 2023Liked by Bill Adler

But it couldn't tell the time.

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With all that data, the time seems to be unnecessary. ;-)

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