What a clever way to tell a story, Bill! It did leave me gasping for breath! I must admit, I'd pobably walk out on a guy like that, too! It makes a subtle point though. We are all becoming far too automated. Carry on like this and we will evolve into human/AI hybrids!
I didn't know till I had written several drafts what would happen at the end (and how to make it all work as a single sentence), but I'm sure the best response was for her to walk away.
Very clever, Bill! This man has chosen to give up his autonomy and become a slave. Sounds dystopian, but really not far off the mark for 2023 if you ask me. Scary!
Bill, I love what you did here. Great cadence, the piece rolls along faster and faster to the perfect ending. I like the one-sentence form too, and might try it with a piece or two. Keep up the good writing.
What a clever way to tell a story, Bill! It did leave me gasping for breath! I must admit, I'd pobably walk out on a guy like that, too! It makes a subtle point though. We are all becoming far too automated. Carry on like this and we will evolve into human/AI hybrids!
I'm glad you enjoyed Life by the Numbers, Jilly.
I didn't know till I had written several drafts what would happen at the end (and how to make it all work as a single sentence), but I'm sure the best response was for her to walk away.
I must have bought the wrong brand.
If only that was real feature!
I would up and leave too!
Yes, even if the restaurant has great desserts -- not worth sticking around for.
Very clever, Bill! This man has chosen to give up his autonomy and become a slave. Sounds dystopian, but really not far off the mark for 2023 if you ask me. Scary!
Thanks, Sharron. I'm glad you enjoyed Life by the Numbers.
Exactly. Fitness trackers are cool, but not always wise.
Lovely! This flowed well, and I really liked the ending.
Thank you, Andrei. I'm happy to hear that.
Ha! Clever, and beautiful!
Thank you, Sujan!
Technology is good, but never forget how to think for yourself.
I agree.
Hahaha! Great twist at the end.
A wonderful story!
Thank you!
Brilliant sentence and story!
Thanks so much, Bill. I’m happy you enjoyed Life by the Numbers.
Bill, I love what you did here. Great cadence, the piece rolls along faster and faster to the perfect ending. I like the one-sentence form too, and might try it with a piece or two. Keep up the good writing.
Thank you, Didi. One-sentence stories are an artform to themselves. If you write any, let me know; I'd love to read them.
I’m glad you used the word ‘salubrious.’
Salubrious is a fun word.
You're such a great author Bill Adler. Another good reality story.
Thank you! I like writing and I'm glad you enjoy my stories.
Good job, I was out of breath reading it.
Thanks, Scott. I think Life by the Numbers is my longest one-sentence story.
What a great way to start the day. I haven’t had a good morning laugh like this in a while. Well done Bill!
Thanks, Dan. Alas, I've looked high and low for that brand of fitness watch, but haven't found it.
But it couldn't tell the time.
With all that data, the time seems to be unnecessary. ;-)