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Aug 7, 2022Liked by Bill Adler

Omg you are one inventive dude. Thanks

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The stats on this one check out, and The Raft shows up in the movie Creepshow, which also depicts a man being lured to his death by a woman's wayward advances. You went pretty deep with this one, Bill 😁

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Aug 7, 2022Liked by Bill Adler

What a super ending (except for the husband!)

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Aug 7, 2022Liked by Bill Adler

Quick story, quick demise! Great read!

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Well that escalated quickly! Great story, Bill!

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I love that you mention “The Raft” by Stephen King - love it! There was an ominous feel from the beginning of your story, and the ending didn’t disappoint in the slightest. Great story as always, Bill!

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Aug 7, 2022Liked by Bill Adler

Bill, Good job and be careful there are a lot of vending machines near your home. I may never be able to put another quarter in a slot.

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"Never tell me the odds." 😆

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Loving the humorous twist at the end Bill!

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The repeating two note crescendo should have been his first clue. She must not have seen Jaws. 😉

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Aug 12, 2022Liked by Bill Adler

Love that ending. Both morbidly funny and chilling. Great job!

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Aug 9, 2022Liked by Bill Adler

Ha ha ha. I love it.

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Hi, Bill: I'm finally active on Substack. Feel free to visit.

Oh wow, exciting story you wrote! So scary that I've just canceled my vacation of seven days in Florida. Those vending machines can be brutal!!

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Thank you! I enjoyed carving this story out of raw dictionary material. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Thanks, Dan. I'm delighted you liked Sharks.

Suddenly, I'm fearful of vending machines, which means I may not be able to go anywhere in Japan. ;-)

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